منتدى مدينة الملوك - مديرية جبن
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منتدى مدينة الملوك - مديرية جبن


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slam guys
How are you?
I hope you are in good health

Today I want to share with you a poem I wrote
It call Between the crowd
The reason that I wrote this poem is cause Of what I hear
from many Muslim youth who live in country like USA
I hear that many of them are afraid to show that they're
Muslim like many girls don't wear hjab cause they don't want people to look at them different.
The Muslim boys you see them , but you don't know to where they belong cause the way they dress
They get the cap the half way pants and the necklace and even fake tatto
In this way they will kill the Islam personality .

I have Q for you It's mor for girls then boys
when you enter a bus or trian and all heads turn towerd you in that moment what is your feeling?

To me I feel bless
and I hold my head up high


ok the poem says


Between the crowd

I stand out


Between the crowd

I feel proud


With the scarf on my head

with the faith in my heart

I know who I am

and I feel bright


Their looks don't scare me

their laugh don't embarrass me


I know who I am

I know what I want

I'm a Muslim

and I'm glad.





Please feel free to fix or change any mistake



عدل سابقا من قبل yemengirl في السبت 14 مارس 2009, 12:36 am عدل 3 مرات

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Masha-allah! Nice poem! And being one of those teenagers in the US, I deal with that kind of stuff too, but I don't care. Because I love being muslim. I feel special. And I feel like I'm the luckiest one out of ALL of those who stare

But I have some suggestions to make on your poem:

When you say this:

With the scarf on my head

with the faith in my heart

I know who I'm

and I feel bright

You should say, "I know who I am." Instead of "I know who I'm"
I sounds kind of weird

change it for the other ones to except for when you are saying this:

I'm a MUslim

and I'm glad.

And also, when you said, "their looks doesn't scare me." that's improper english. You are suppose to say "Their looks DON'T scare me" so yeah
I hope this helped! And good job
Wink

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Thanks jasmine

It sounds better now

and I'm still learning English
and I make many mistake
That's why I joined this forum
to learn from all of you

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Let me first say that I feel very proud
when I encounter an educated muslim women
who is also proud of her way of life
and never give up to of those sick humans or say
human-like people around her
and you sister in this poem has explained so much
in a very short terms
walk firm you are on the right path
may Allah grant you what is perfect for you
salam

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keep it up sister as my brother (optimistic) Abo Jamal said you are on the right path and i really feel sorry for those who feel ashamed of their ISLAM. I wish them al hidaih from allah say inshallah

descriptionحصريرد: Btween The Crowd

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Great job! You wrote all this and you're still learning english? You are amazing! Keep it up sister you'r doing great.
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